High job demands, stress and sense of commitment are among the main reasons people go to work when they are ill. This way they accomplish important tasks, but may infect others or get some serious health problems themselves. In your opinion should people go to work if they are sick? Support your point of view with relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Having job is

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Having a job is

very important in

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society. Job which

help

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helps

us to earn money which help us in everyday living. Job which we can meet different people and help us to

built

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build

a better future.

but

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But

, having job need of full time commitment like in office

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work sometimes they

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work, sometimes they

need to finish

there

of them or themselves

their

work

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before going home or when you

work

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mall

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the mall

a mall

during

holiday

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the holiday

they did not allow

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employee

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employees

the employee

an employee

to take a break or taking

dayoff

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a day off

day off

the day off

that's the time that

other

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the other

is getting

stress

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stressed

and getting sick. Other

employee

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they decide to go to

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work

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work, although

although

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they are not feeling well because of some reasons.

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first some

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First, some

First some

of the company they ask the

employee

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medical record to prove that they are sick or not feeling well during the day that they not go to

work

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, was some

employee

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who's really need money they choose to go to

work

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while they are sick because they

dont

do not

don't

want to deduct any amount in

there

of them or themselves

their

salary. In my opinion in

this

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kind of society we have now it is better not to go

work

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when we are not feeling well or sick.

sometimes

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Sometimes

simple problems

becomes

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become

big problem.

many

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Many

of us think that it's a simple headaches or body pain sometimes we ignore it so we decide to go

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work but

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work, but

at the end it

getting

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gets

is getting

worst so

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worse, so

worse so

for me it is better not to go to

work

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when we are sick.

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, to company it is better to have a rules and regulations about

this

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matter so that the

employee

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will determine or know what she/he needs to do when she or he experience

this

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kind of

situition

the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time

situation

situations

health

a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease

Health

very important company

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a very important company

cannot earn money without the help of

there

of them or themselves

their

employee

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so they need to protect and give rest to

there

of them or themselves

their

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employee

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employees

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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