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children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brough up by wealthy parents. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The importance of children upbringing is a frequent topic of discussion. It is argued that infants who grow in poorer families are more prepared for their later lives than kids educated by richer parents. I believe that
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 the latter may be ready for the adult
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 by facing other difficult circumstances at an early age. On the one hand, there is no doubt that children who grow in families which do not have big amounts of money are more likely to face difficulties in their childhood and teenage.
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, they may be obliged to
setp
any maneuver made as part of progress toward a goal
step
stop
 into the job market at an early age because of the financial troubles of their parents.
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 a situation
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makes
 them experience different existences in comparison with ones of
other children but,
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other children, but
 at the same time,
thay
people in general
they
that
 can acquire awareness of how the labour market works. For
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 reason, the growth process of these kids takes place rapidly and
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 allows them to become mature earlier in
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.
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, infants growing
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with
 wealthier families are more likely to have
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a
 higher level of education. As it is widely known, the more is the individuals culture the more they will be able to manage and understand
life
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's issues.
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, the schooling system allows these young students to make formative activities useful to develop their critical thinking towards the world affairs.
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, children of
whealty
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
 and poor families may face
troblues
a source of difficulty
troubles
 not connected with money,
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 as illnesses or other particular circumstances, which make their upbringing process faster. To conclude, I believe that both children
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from
poorer
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poor
 and richer backgrounds may grow prepared for adult
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 because their maturity depends on what they have experienced over their childhood and teenage and not on their parents financial incomes.

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