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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views

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It is generally thought, in some countries, that
death
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 penalty is the best way to convince people not to commit crimes. Others believe that a long
life
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 sentence is a better way. In
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 essay I will discuss
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 topic, taking into account advantages and disadvantages from both points of view. Regarding the
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 view, we could say that there isn't nothing worse than
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. So with what courage would anyone commit a
crime
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, in a country where capital punishment is legal? On the base of
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 logical reasoning, in
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 way infractions could be reduced to almost zero.
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, we can see that in most cases
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 is not true. In fact, despite
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 belief, studies reveal the opposite.
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, there is capital punishment in some of the USA States, but in these places the
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 rate is not less than that of other cities or countries where the
death
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 penalty is not allowed. Contrariwise, according to the studies conducted on
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 topic, a long
life
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 sentence seems to be a much better deterrent. From a certain point of view, spend all of our remaining
life
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 in prison can be worse than an immediate
death
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. In conclusion, I believe that capital punishment is absolutely not necessary to reduce
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 rate, but I think that the most important thing about
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 topic is that we don't have any right to kill another human being, whatever the
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 he has committed. None of us can have a greater right over a person's
life
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.
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