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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views

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It is generally thought, in some countries, that
death
 penalty is the best way to convince people not to commit crimes. Others believe that a long
life
 sentence is a better way. In
this
 essay I will discuss
this
 topic, taking into account advantages and disadvantages from both points of view. Regarding the
first
 view, we could say that there isn't nothing worse than
death
. So with what courage would anyone commit a
crime
, in a country where capital punishment is legal? On the base of
this
 logical reasoning, in
this
 way infractions could be reduced to almost zero.
However
, we can see that in most cases
this
 is not true. In fact, despite
this
 belief, studies reveal the opposite.
For example
, there is capital punishment in some of the USA States, but in these places the
crime
 rate is not less than that of other cities or countries where the
death
 penalty is not allowed. Contrariwise, according to the studies conducted on
this
 topic, a long
life
 sentence seems to be a much better deterrent. From a certain point of view, spend all of our remaining
life
 in prison can be worse than an immediate
death
. In conclusion, I believe that capital punishment is absolutely not necessary to reduce
crime
 rate, but I think that the most important thing about
this
 topic is that we don't have any right to kill another human being, whatever the
crime
 he has committed. None of us can have a greater right over a person's
life
.
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