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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Other think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The innovation of the technology has been the highly debated topic since a decade. Some believe that numerous option among the electronic devices has raised the
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 in between impoverished and wealthy civilian. Whereas, the rest of the folks argue that it has decreased the
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, state the opinion in the favour of making equal status among the civilian. On the one hand, the main reason behind the social status is the capacity to buy a latest electronic
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. The wealthy folks have more money and tend to be eager to show off their strong financial status to the world.
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, there is a clear line formed in between the impoverished and wealthy people as wealthy folks have the branded gadgets.
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, according to the apple company of the USA report, 70% buyer of the apple appliances belonged to the wealthy family as they can able to buy those expensive appliances.
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, except for the renowned companies, many other offers the same
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 at a reasonable price.
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, all classes of people are able to buy those gadgets. Because, those gadgets are in the excellent design and fundamental functions to use it.
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, no one can distinguish the
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 between the people who have the same
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, as per the user data of the mobile phone offices, there are almost 95% of the people have the electronic
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 due to the availability of more options in it. From my point of view, I believed, nowadays, just having a appliances, no one can identify whether the other person is from a wealthy family or poor. Due to having branded a phone with the impoverished people as well. In conclusion, having a latest
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 does not mean that the person is wealthy as now everyone has the range of new technology at their home.
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, to identify the
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 between poor and rich person, the best is the bank statement and their living style.
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