Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money other argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are some persons that think assume a rough situation like unsuitable occupation or lack of wealth is the better way, in the other

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believe not giving up and try harder is the key. All of us don't have the same resources so every single case it's different. Some positions are more difficult that the other ones could be because they have no possibilities for

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education or they have people depends

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them, could be many reasons for

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people to prefer accept the situation than put in the risk everything they have and land in a

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bad

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the opposite and don't give up even the view they have ahead it's not favourable.

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it a try and have more opportunities to choose than keep going been struggling. In my opinion, I'm one of the

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group. Maybe you don't have a good

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work hard and try different possibilities until I will get what I will deserve or at least I felt happier that I was before.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

201 words

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Contentment
Resilience
Personal growth
Endurance
Initiative
Advancement
Catalyst
Financial stability
Status quo
Innovation
Missed opportunities
Life satisfaction
Adverse situations
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Risk assessment
Change management
Self-improvement
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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money other argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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