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Nowadays many people choose ready made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantage and disadvantage of such a choice?

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At present where a
lot
 of foods are readily made available, many people would rather opt for instant foods than preparing it themselves for certain reasons. Along with either choice are
also
 a number advantages and disadvantages. To start, many individuals would prefer ready made foods than cooking at home because of the lack of
time
 to prepare it themselves. Purchasing
prepacked
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Prepacked
 goods undeniably saves a
lot
 of
time
, from preparing the ingredients itself.
For instance
, my cousin, who is a working student, buys herself canned goods that only requires to be prepared in just a couple of minutes. It does not require her to waste a
lot
 of
time
 to slice it, cook it, perhaps.
Hence
,
prepacked
Suggestion
Prepacked
 foods are preferred by someone who is very conscious
to
Suggestion
of
time
. Aside from the ready-made foods being
time
-efficient, money is wasted. When buying foods from shops and restaurants, the prices seemed to be a bit higher. One does not just pay for the ingredients
used but
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used, but
also
 the
time
 and effort put by the one who cooked. To illustrate, when I buy for a serving of pasta in a
fastfood
Suggestion
fast food
, it would cost me more than twice the amount I could have just
spend
Suggestion
spent
 when I buy scratch ingredients and cook it my own. Since the readily made available foods are much more pricey compared to the price you have paid when you make yourself,
thus
 a few dollars would be wasted as well. To put it in a nutshell, buying
prepacked
Suggestion
Prepacked
 meals do have an advantage and a disadvantage. While it does save a
lot
 of
time
 by quitting the process of preparing,
money
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money, however
however
, is put to waste as ready made foods are much more pricey. One has to weigh the benefits and drawbacks before deciding whether to just eat a home-cooked meal or not.
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