The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The below chart illustrates the
number
of Japanese
going abroad as tourists
between the years
of
1985 and 1995 (in a decade) and the share of Australia as the destination market for these Change preposition
apply
tourists
.
Overall
, the number
of Japanese
tourists
has been in gradual
increase Add an article
a gradual
the gradual
from
1985 reaching Change preposition
since
the
peak in Correct article usage
a
in
1995 Remove the redundancy
apply
around
15 million Change preposition
at around
while
the percentage that used to go to Australia has also
grew
from 2% to 6% on average, showing to be a great market destination for Change the verb form
grown
Japanese
.
In common, the number
Japanese
Change preposition
of Japanese
tourists
going abroad has increased dramatically presenting three fold
growth in the decade between 1985 and 1995. At the beginning of the period, the Add a hyphen
three-fold
number
of tourists
was about 5 million in 1985. Although
there were
Change the verb form
was
annual
steady increase, Add an article
an annual
but
the Remove the conjunction
apply
years
1991 and 1993 did not show a notable jump compared to their previous years
. Apart from
this
, Japanese
tourism sector has Add an article
the Japanese
went
up dramatically.
Australia’s tourism market has attracted Change the verb form
gone
Japanese
tourists
at an alarming rate. It rose from 2$ in 1985 to 6% in 1995. It indicated steady growth except 1989
and 1994 Change preposition
in 1989
that
illustrated a low drop compared to the previous Correct pronoun usage
which
years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, japanese, tourists, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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