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Some people believe positive thinking has benefits,while others consider, it has drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Undoubtedly, the attitude of
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an
 individual play a pivotal role in his
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 towards the situations.
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, some section of society think that it is beneficial to live
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 with a positive attitude
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 others are not in favour of
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 statement.
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, in my view,
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 way of thinking has both positive and negative impacts. To commence with, the optimistic nature is a root of the overconfident since a person become overconfident and spend maximum time to thinking rather than doing some productive work to achieve the desire, when that dream does not become reality or unable to attain a goal
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 one
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 and that cause mental
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 as suicide, break down mentally and physically.
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, taking a positive attitude towards the work gives the best results as it
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gives
 more confidence and hope
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 a step to achieve something new and productive from everyday action performed by them
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which can revive them from any problem that they have experienced in
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, a student will learn new things from daily lessons to get success in his
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. In my opinion,
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the public
 has realized that it is any day better to look at
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 in a more positive way as it is pace to achieve the targets as failure is a step toward success.
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 the excess of everything is bad,
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 approach can
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 take a heavy toll on the
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 as people are unable to understand what they are facing in their
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. In conclusion
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 both sides have their own convincing arguments yet it has felt that it depends on the ones to use
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 approach in a positive or a negative manner.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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