Throughout history, people have dreamed about perfect society, but they have not agreed what an ideal society is. What do you think the most important elements to have perfect society in the modern world? How people can achieve an ideal society?

Thesedays
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These days
, most of the people want to live
in perfect
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in a perfect society, but
in a perfect society but
society
but they hold different views about
good
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the good society
society
that how it can be an ideal
society
.According to me, many factors
such
as
education
and
health
of residents are necessary for making an ideal community and
this
work should be done by both
government
and individuals.
To begin
with, a perfect
society
requires some elements and one of them is
education
.As, everyone wants to get
good job
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a good job
for
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of
in
catering his or her needs and
education
plays a vital role
for
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in
getting jobs because it provides knowledge and skills. Those
,
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who have good
qualification
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qualities
,
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,
are likely to get well-paid jobs easily. Resultantly, the rate of joblessness decreases and people become wealthier.
Secondly
,
health
is considered as most important for enjoying life and it should be
top priority
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the top priority
a top priority
of
government
. Since science and technology are well developed, people can get rid
from
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of
uncured diseases
likewise
cancer
,
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,
tuberculosis and asthma as compared to
past
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the past
.
On the other hand
, some measures should be taken by bureaucracy and folks to make
perfect
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a perfect society
society
.
First
of all, campaigns must be organised by authorities for making people aware about the
health
.Nowadays, many
health
ailments are being faced
by
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with
masses and it is believed that prevention is better than cure.
Moreover
, paying taxes to
government
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the government
is highly imperative because it lets to officials to spend money on improving mandatory sectors like as,
education
, medical and infrastructure that these help to make an ideal
society
. To sum up,
although
government
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the government
is responsible for making a perfect community, without taking help of
public
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the public
, it cannot be done.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • utopian
  • egalitarian
  • diversity
  • sustainable practices
  • enlightenment
  • innovation
  • accountable
  • transparent
  • universal healthcare
  • wellbeing
  • socio-economic
  • critical thinking
  • governance
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