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The growing number if overweight people is putting a burden on the healthcare system in an efforts to deal with the issues involved. Some people think that the best way to solve this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
increasing number
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an increasing number
increasing numbers
 of people are
concern
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concerned
 about their health.
However
, to deal with
this
 issue, obesity is creating
burden
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a burden
 on the system or
healthcare
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health care
. Some people opine that
school
 activities should
also
 include sports problem. I agree that raising
awerness
having knowledge of
awareness
 during
school
time
 will help students in their future. During
school
time
, including sports and lessons related to physical
awerness
having knowledge of
awareness
 would certainly create
habit
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habits
 of being healthy in their daily life.
In other words
, students will get to know the benefits of staying fit and would encourage them to do exercise. It would help them to stay healthy physically as well as mentally. A recent
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 system mentioned that in today's
time
, many countries started doing yoga and other exercise in order to get rid of anxiety and stress.
Furthermore
, if Scholl curriculum will give physical education, the consumption of unhealthy food will certainly decrease.
In other words
, knowing the harm for the body, people will start taking nutritious food in order to stay healthy.
However
, lack of knowledge regarding diet plan might create
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
.
For example
, if dietitian will not add proteins and vitamins in diet
chart it
Accept comma addition
chart, it
 would affect people in their future. To conclude, raising
awerness
having knowledge of
awareness
 about physical health during
school
time
 would encourage students to stay healthy and fit
from
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for
 their young age.
However
, proper knowledge is essential in order to not create negative impact physically.
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