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In many Countries, the amount of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think ithis is and what can be done about it? Give reasons for your answers and include and relevant examples from your experience.

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In most of the
third
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 world countries, the
crime
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rate
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 has been drastically increasing since
last
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 decade. Among the many factors involving in the rise of
crime
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rate
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, lack of formal
education
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 and unemployment are the top most reasons.
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 of all,
provision
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the provision
 of basic
education
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build
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builds
 the character and give a good perspective of living to the people. The formal
education
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 makes us capable of making the difference between the right and wrong.The literate
society
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 has lower number of
crime
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rate
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,
for instance
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, USA, UK and other developed countries
has
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have
 lower number of
crime
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rate
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 as compared to China and Pakistan.
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, the lack of jobs is another hinder in lowering the
crime
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rate
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. The
society
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 where most of the people are jobless and don’t have any respectable means of earning
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mostly
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most
 people starts looking for shortcuts like robbery, snatching and killing to meet their needs. It is the responsibility of the government to control the
crime
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rate
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 and provide
peaceful environment
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a peaceful environment
 to the people living in
society
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.Government can control it by providing formal
education
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 to each and every citizen.
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,
availability
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the availability
 of jobs to the needy person, giving a fix amount of money to the unemployed people are some of the measures which should be taken by the government to stop
further
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 increase in the
crime
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rate
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. To conclude, Government should take some bold steps like provision of jobs and basic
education
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 to the citizens of
society
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 can control the
crime
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rate
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 and somehow makes the environment of the
society
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 peaceful for
living
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a living
.

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