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17. Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

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As we all know, it is a long journey for an ordinary person to become a scholar and to obtain
high level
Suggestion
a high level
high levels
 of mental capacity and
intelligence
. Some people believe that team
work
 will enhance the process and benefit individual gaining high level of cognitive capacity easily and efficiently
 .
Accept space
.
 I totally agree with them and the essay will discuss my opinion.
To begin
 with, it is a truth that working together will encourage individual's growth of
intelligence
 and wisdom as long as all members are willing to cooperate and learn together. There is a Chinese saying, " In a
group
 of people with more than three individuals, there is always a teacher among them."  Participants will receive feedbacks from the peers during
group
work
. Useful and precise feedbacks will boost receiver's mental capacity and broad their knowledge horizontally. Working in isolation will provide flexible schedule;
however
, brain storm with peers may contribute input of novel concepts and ideas which will benefit
intelligence
 growth.
In addition
,
group
work
 will provide opportunities for participants to challenge their cognitive capacities. During the team
work
, participants are required to stay focused and contribute to their task.
Therefore
, teamwork will improve their brain functioning,
such
 as attention, memory, and information organization. Meanwhile, the latter will enhance participants' ability to focus, learn, and solve problems. Some studies show that working with a bunch of people  will help members to understand topics or tasks more thoroughly and easily, especially for certain sophistical topics or tasks.  In conclusion,
group
work
 will contribute to the growth of its members' cognitive skills and
intelligence
 due to peers' brain storm and learning one another.
Moreover
, team
work
 will assist members to practice their mental abilities more frequently.
Therefore
, I support that working together or learning together will benefit people and help them become smarter.
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