Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that, high

school

students should

work

for community without any financial benefit by involving with a charity, enhancing the n

eighborhood

a surrounding or nearby region

neighbourhood

or teaching sports to children. I strongly agree with

this

opinion.

First

of all, high

school

students can gather m

any

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much

information through spending their times with a

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organization where people are providing social service. Because they will get the chance to meet with different c

lasses

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class

people

such

as from different age group and from d

ifferent educational background.

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different educational backgrounds

They will be able to know about others and their condition. Actually, only academic education is not enough to teach

school

children about various materials. If a

school

student can meet with a university student through social

work

at that time, they will get c

hance to talk each

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the chance to talk with each

the chance to talk each

the chance to talk to each

a chance to talk each

other and the high

school

student will get some knowledge about u

niversity.

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the university

I think, to understand the real world unpaid

work

for c

ommunity

Suggestion

the community

would be great for high

school

students.

Secondly

, when secondary

school

students will engage with a charity f

irm

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firm, then

then

they get real value of

society

. Through working for under privilege people, they will motivate to

work

for poor people in f

uture.

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the future

In other word, they will be ethically strong and it will decrease the crime rate in

society

. Not only t

hat but

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that, but

also

high

school

time is p

eak moment

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a peak moment

the peak moment

to make them understand that maintaining g

ood relationship

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good relationships

a good relationship

with n

eighbor

a person who lives (or is located) near another

neighbours

and charity

work

for

society

are essential. To conclude, I completely agree with the given opinion because it will help high

school

students to gather knowledge as well as to be a good person in

society

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