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Nowadays, more and more people are having consumer goods like refrigerators and washing machines. Does this development bring more advantages than disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the modern world, everything runs pretty fast whether it's the machines or the schedule of human beings. Nowadays, people are more focused on earning more and more money. The changes in technology help us to survive in
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 fast paced life. In the past, people used to store water in containers in order to have cold water and now we have refrigerators. Technology makes living easy. People believe that new is always better and they accept
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 development with full heart. It not only make living easier, but
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 increase the rate of employment. There are many public/private sectors which are hiring engineers, technicians, to develop these machines. In the past, people have used to wait for hours in order to have a meal. They used to create fire
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 was able to cook food and nowadays, they can have a good meal in minutes by cooking it in microwave ovens, hot plates, etc.
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, when I was a kid, we used to live in a village and we did not have refrigerators, washing machines at that time. My mother used to wash clothes with her hands and it generally took her 4 hours to wash all of them and
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 she used to hang them up at the roof.
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, in the age of artificial intelligence, we can wash and dry clothes at once in the same machine. It makes washing clothes easy and
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, it saves lots of time. To sum up, development in the technology brings more advantages than disadvantages. In
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 fast paced life it is necessary to have
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 change. It not only make living easier, but
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 opens the door of employment for unemployed ones.

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