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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress?

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There are many new different
technology
 has been developed in all the fields. One of them is dishwashers which does not cost for any lab
or an
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
d another one is com
puter wh
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a computer
ich helps in communication. Ultimately, many people believe that these devices are responsible for making individual lives uncomplicated whereas, oth
er th
any of various alternatives; some other
another
inks that newly invented machines make their lives more problematic. According to me, both the views are discussed below.
Firstly
, many new machines are available in the mar
ket which he
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market, which
lps to make work on time with less effort. As earlier mentioned, that it does not cost for labour. Having a newly developed item in
th
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of
e day to day lifestyle can help people in various ways.
Moreover
, it has many benefits of using it correctly. For an instance, mobile is one of the modern items that people are using in their daily life. After innovating mobile pho
nes co
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phone
mmunication with people who lives in oth
er co
any of various alternatives; some other
another
untry becomes very easy and convenient.
Also
, it helps to store all the important messages as well as contact number of the other, so that you do not have to remember everything.
However
, Many of them thinks that modern
technology
 mak
e th
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makes
eir lives more difficult compare to previous because many of them does not know how to operate the devices. Some people are uneducated and for them it might be true that they will have difficultly during using machines.
In addition
 to that, people do not have time to learn new things and they bel
ieves th
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believe
at it is very difficult to
use
. For an example, Microwaves can heat food in cou
ple of
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a couple
sec
ond but mo
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second, but
st of the women’s does not know how to
use
 it. So they
use
 sto
ve to
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the stove
a stove
 warm up food and which can take up to 15-20 minutes. So some device may be difficult to
use
 it. To conclude, modern
technology
 has great role to make people life easy and stress free by doing work in cou
ple of
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a couple
 min
utes but th
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minutes, but
ere are still some complicated devices which most of the people doe
s not know ho
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do not know
w to handle it. Overall, keeping ourselves up to date with
technology
 can help to make our lives stress free.
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