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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the image has a great influence on communication, especially if compared to the written word, in the past, people used to write down whatever they
want including
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want, including
 work and
study and
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study, and
this
 was why they were affected by the words they saw as well as assigning much time to
reading
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read
.
Although
, the written word
has always related
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always relates
 to culture and history, with the discovery of the internet and rapid improvements of technology, all kinds of people are attracted to the visuals.
Firstly
, starting with students who definitely study using written
materials but
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materials, but
 they get a better understanding while seeing a diagram, graph or a picture with illustrations on it,
secondly
 the kids who are able to read stories in order to be
entertained but
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entertained, but
 they tend to choose the cartoons or the stories which are full of
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 pictures and that’s how they get fully attracted. These days, there are
such
 photographic talents, not only they completely grab our attention because of the myriad of nature or the details that photographers capture, but
also
 inspires us to look at the environment around us in a different way. The industry of cinema is exploiting the image concept as well because they suppose that it plays a significant role of conveying the feelings of the actors and producers through a screen.
Last
 but not least, all people get attracted by the use of images easier and faster than they do
by
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with
 written words and I think
this
 mainly depends on the
time pace
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time, pace
 and how it moves
rapidly so
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rapidly, so
 they prefer to understand faster by looking rather than taking some time to read or write.

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