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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world, ready to eat meals have assisted people to adjust to the fast modern lifestyle. These foods bring about a number of benefits
such
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 as reducing the
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 frame for preparing foods.
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, there are a number of drawbacks that arise from consuming already prepared meals including
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 poisoning. On the one hand, ready to eat
meals reduce
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meals, reduce
 the
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 needed to prepare meals.
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, foods that are already cooked do not require a lot of preparation.
For instance
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, the two minute noodles can just be boiled for five minutes, and can be eaten immediately.
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 allows the majority of people to
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 their
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 on other important tasks without worrying about cooking a whole meal from scratch.
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, convenience foods are easy to carry around anywhere at any given
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. People are able to consume these foods whenever necessary as they can easily be stored.
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, there are certain drawbacks that arise from consuming already prepared meals.
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, most of these foods are not consumed fresh, most of them will have been prepared for a while, and people may end up suffering from
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 poisoning due to eating stale
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.
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, these ready to eat
meals loose
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meals, loose
 the natural
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the sensation that results when taste buds in the tongue and throat convey information about the chemical composition of a soluble stimulus
taste
 of foods. Because of the preservatives used to ensure their shelf life lasts longer, the foods tend to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 the taste of good
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.
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, the majority of already prepared foods happen to be fast foods. As more people prefer convenience
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, the more they are predisposed to obesity. If people continue to eat fast
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 they end
uo
spatially or metaphorically from a lower to a higher position
up
you
 suffering from health problems. Conclusively,
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 ready to eat
meals limit
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meals, limit
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 for cooking meals, the drawbacks
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 as health issues that may arise cannot be ignored.
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