Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In a

last

few

decades there

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decades, there

has been a significant increase in the figures of foreign visitors.

This

eventually results in tension

instead

of getting along and understanding each other because of cultural differences.

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essay seeks to investigate fourth discussed points along with concrete evidence. With regards to individuals, there is plethora of supporting points for the above mentioned statement.

First

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The first

and the most lucrative point is, most of the tourists visit in order to shoot for documentaries and not to actually gain knowledge regarding the tradition and history

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Moreover many

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Moreover, many

individuals don’t really get the concept of their culture due to

difference

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differences

the difference

of language.

For

instance according

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instance, according

to a study only less than 5% of the tourists visiting a place actually has some knowledge about the local language spoken there.

Consequently

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Consequently, this

this

results in communication gap because of which people don’t get along.

Secondly

, as per the statistics

travelers

a person who changes location

travellers

travels

don’t take rules and regulations that seriously on a public place. To illustrate, as per a recently conducted survey more than half of the litter and mess created

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open place was because of the international tourists. Eventually the local residents tend to dislike the

tourists

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tourists, hence

hence

this

gives rise to differences. To recapitulate while tourism does bring a lot of business

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the

country resulting

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country, resulting

in boost of

economy but

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the economy, but

the economy but

there are indisputable cons

also

for

this

statement. From my notion

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due to differences in culture, traditions and history individuals lack a sense of understanding which at

last

results in differences.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

256 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash.All payments may have to be mafe by card or using phones. Do yoy think this will happen one day? Why fo you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash ?