Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In a
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decades, there
has been a significant increase in the figures of foreign visitors.
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eventually results in tension
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of getting along and understanding each other because of cultural differences.
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and the most lucrative point is, most of the tourists visit in order to shoot for documentaries and not to actually gain knowledge regarding the tradition and history
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Moreover many
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Moreover, many
individuals don’t really get the concept of their culture due to
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differences
the difference
of language.
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instance according
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instance, according
to a study only less than 5% of the tourists visiting a place actually has some knowledge about the local language spoken there.
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results in communication gap because of which people don’t get along.
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, as per the statistics
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
travels
don’t take rules and regulations that seriously on a public place. To illustrate, as per a recently conducted survey more than half of the litter and mess created
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as
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an
open place was because of the international tourists. Eventually the local residents tend to dislike the
tourists
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tourists, hence
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gives rise to differences. To recapitulate while tourism does bring a lot of business
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country, resulting
in boost of
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the economy, but
the economy but
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statement. From my notion
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due to differences in culture, traditions and history individuals lack a sense of understanding which at
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results in differences.
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