Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In a

last

few

decades there

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decades, there

has been a significant increase in the figures of foreign visitors.

This

eventually results in tension

instead

of getting along and understanding each other because of cultural differences.

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essay seeks to investigate fourth discussed points along with concrete evidence. With regards to individuals, there is plethora of supporting points for the above mentioned statement.

First

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The first

and the most lucrative point is, most of the tourists visit in order to shoot for documentaries and not to actually gain knowledge regarding the tradition and history

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Moreover many

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Moreover, many

individuals don’t really get the concept of their culture due to

difference

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differences

the difference

of language.

For

instance according

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instance, according

to a study only less than 5% of the tourists visiting a place actually has some knowledge about the local language spoken there.

Consequently

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Consequently, this

this

results in communication gap because of which people don’t get along.

Secondly

, as per the statistics

travelers

a person who changes location

travellers

travels

don’t take rules and regulations that seriously on a public place. To illustrate, as per a recently conducted survey more than half of the litter and mess created

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open place was because of the international tourists. Eventually the local residents tend to dislike the

tourists

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tourists, hence

hence

this

gives rise to differences. To recapitulate while tourism does bring a lot of business

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the

country resulting

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country, resulting

in boost of

economy but

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the economy, but

the economy but

there are indisputable cons

also

for

this

statement. From my notion

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due to differences in culture, traditions and history individuals lack a sense of understanding which at

last

results in differences.

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In a nutshell
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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