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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The provided bar chart represents an overview of the
production
 and
consumption
 of electricity in
top
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the top
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 ten countries
in2014
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in 2014
. The units are measured in
kWH
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kW
kWh
.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that China and
United
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the United
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 States were
highest
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the highest
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 amount of energy produced and consumed;
whereas
, Korea was least of position. The ratio of
production
 and
consumption
 was equilibrium in
Rassia
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Russia
 and Korea,
while
 Japan, India, France and Brazil produced higher electricity rather than consumed. In 2014, China was a significant amount of electric energy consumed and produced compared to the other nine countries and it was almost 5,300 and 5,400 respectively.
Subsequently
,
United
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the United
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 States used and produced nearly 3,900 and 4,100 respectively.
On the other hand
, Korea had
lowest
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the lowest
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 position in the
production
 and
consumption
 of electricity and
ratio
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the ratio
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 of both segments
were
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was
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 equal and
their
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there
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 were approximately 450;
nonetheless
,
similar
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a similar
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 ratio
followed
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was followed
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 by Russia and
it
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which
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 was 1,050.
In contrast
, the
production
 of electric energy was higher compared to
consumption
 in Japan, Brazil, India and France; it was nearly 940, 530, 875 and 565 respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dominance
  • industrial scale
  • consumption rates
  • efficiency
  • export capabilities
  • developing/emerging economies
  • rapid industrialization
  • economic growth
  • global disparity
  • energy usage
  • renewable energy sources
  • non-renewable energy sources
  • sustainability efforts
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