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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart represents an overview of the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of electricity in
top
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the top
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 ten countries
in2014
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in 2014
. The units are measured in
kWH
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kW
kWh
.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that China and
United
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the United
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 States were
highest
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the highest
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 amount of energy produced and consumed;
whereas
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, Korea was least of position. The ratio of
production
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 and
consumption
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 was equilibrium in
Rassia
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Russia
 and Korea,
while
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 Japan, India, France and Brazil produced higher electricity rather than consumed. In 2014, China was a significant amount of electric energy consumed and produced compared to the other nine countries and it was almost 5,300 and 5,400 respectively.
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,
United
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 States used and produced nearly 3,900 and 4,100 respectively.
On the other hand
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, Korea had
lowest
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the lowest
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 position in the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of electricity and
ratio
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the ratio
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 of both segments
were
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was
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 equal and
their
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 were approximately 450;
nonetheless
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,
similar
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a similar
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 ratio
followed
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was followed
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 by Russia and
it
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which
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 was 1,050.
In contrast
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, the
production
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 of electric energy was higher compared to
consumption
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 in Japan, Brazil, India and France; it was nearly 940, 530, 875 and 565 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dominance
  • industrial scale
  • consumption rates
  • efficiency
  • export capabilities
  • developing/emerging economies
  • rapid industrialization
  • economic growth
  • global disparity
  • energy usage
  • renewable energy sources
  • non-renewable energy sources
  • sustainability efforts
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