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Many modern children spend a great deal of time sitting in front of a television or computer screen. This is extremely harmful to their development. Therefore, parents should strictly limit the time that children spend in this way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally accepted that spending too much
time
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 in front if
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 harms children’s development.
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, in my opinion, parents should, by all means, limit their
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children
TV
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 and
computer
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 screen
time
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, especially while they are younger. Watching
TV
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 or using a
computer
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 can be addictive, even for adults. Parents must prevent their children from developing bad habits, like spending a lot of their
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 in front of the
TV
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, early on. Not only should parents strictly limit their
children's'
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children's
 screen
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, but they
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 need to be role models. Certainly, younger children will need more guidance, while teenagers can be given more responsibility in how they spend their
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.
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, watching
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 is a passive way to spend
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 with no social interaction. While
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 point is not so much about computers, physical exercise and playing with other children are essential activities for healthy development. Spending a lot of
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 in front of a
computer
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 or
TV
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 screens limit’s a child
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 for
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 activities. Especially younger children
can not
can not
cannot
 concentrate for an extended
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 span without breaks. Watching
TV
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 or playing
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 games for many hours can hurt their ability to concentrate on their homework or a book later on. So even if the content watched is age adequate and educational watching it for too long can be harmful for a child. All things considered, there are many reasons why parents are well-advised to monitor their
childrens’
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children
 use of
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 and computers closely. Especially younger children should be guided to spend their
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 inactive and healthy ways.

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