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There are many different types of music in the world today.why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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It is undeniable that
music
 plays an important role for many people.
Music
 has a magical power that can not only make us
happy but
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happy, but
 can
also
 comfort us when we are sad.
Therefore
,
this
 is the main reason why we need
music
 in our daily lives.
Firstly
, there are many different types of
music
 that
was created
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were created
from
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for
 people from the ancient time to these modern days. Nowadays, international
music
 becomes more popular than traditional
music
. Meanwhile, there are
also
 some people who are against
to
being one more than one
two
 international
music
 and give support to traditional
music
.
Secondly
, in my
country
, international
music
such
 as K-Pop
music
 are gradually replacing our traditional
music
 in many peoples' minds. Only elder people stand with our traditional
music
 and, teenagers and adults are now focusing on international
music
. Before these days, our traditional
music
 could represent our culture and attractive to foreigners and were very precious to our citizens. Now, our traditional
music
 becomes faded.
Last
 but not least, for a
country
, it is very crucial to keep its tradition not to lose its reputation.
Although
music
 is
music
, we shouldn't neglect our traditional
music
 while international
music
 is trending now. For me as a teenager, I
also
 like international
music
 because it really gives me a lot of
amusement but
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amusement, but
 I
also
 listen to my traditional
music
 as it reminds me of my
country
.
Therefore
, in my opinion, traditional
music
 of a
country
 is more important than international
music
that is
 heard everywhere nowadays.
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