Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Some
people
believe that today's communication between friends and relatives has been made worse by Use synonyms
television
. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will discuss Linking Words
this
topic taking into account reasons in support and against Linking Words
this
belief.
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Firstly
, in almost any family there is that one person Linking Words
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
spend
the majority of his Change the verb form
spends
time
in front of Use synonyms
Use synonyms
television
, zapping through the channels and avoiding any contact with the other family members. Add an article
the television
a television
This
habit can ruin not only our relationship with our parents or our siblingsLinking Words
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
with our friends. Because of Linking Words
television
, these Use synonyms
people
avoid going out and Use synonyms
spend
some Wrong verb form
spending
time
doing some valuable activity with other Use synonyms
people
of their age. The consequences are obviously not good. Isolation, loneliness and laziness Use synonyms
cane
make a person's life much more sad and difficult. Correct your spelling
can
Socialize
is one of the most fundamental things to do, especially when we are young, the age Wrong verb form
Socializing
in
which we should make our most important friendships.
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at
On the other hand
, I don't believe that Linking Words
television
only can be blamed for Use synonyms
this
condition that some Linking Words
people
unfortunately liveUse synonyms
.
I grew Change preposition
in.
watching
Change preposition
up watching
television
, but Use synonyms
this
never prevented me from Linking Words
also
going outside and Linking Words
play
with my friends in the park. I think that Wrong verb form
playing
family's
role is very important in educating, especially the young, to not spend too much Correct article usage
the family's
time
in front of a screen, because our Use synonyms
time
is precious and we should spend it doing valuable activities with valuable Use synonyms
people
.
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Finally
, I believe that Linking Words
television
cannot be considered as an evil instrument that Use synonyms
make
us lazy and lonely Change the verb form
makes
people
. If used well, TV could be Use synonyms
also
instructive, so it depends Linking Words
from
Change preposition
on
us
how we use it. We should be able to understand if are watching too much Correct pronoun usage
apply
television
and Use synonyms
consequently
wasting too much Linking Words
time
Use synonyms
of
our life.Change preposition
in
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coherence cohesion
In the introduction, it is important to directly address the given statement and state your position clearly.
task response
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and presents clear and comprehensive ideas. However, providing more specific examples to support your points would further strengthen your response.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite