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Today the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solution.

#quality #life #cities
The standard of living is
important aspect
Suggestion
an important aspect
 in human's
life
.
However
, in Urban areas the quality which has to be in people's
life
 is getting deteriorated which leads to many causes in their lives.
This
 essay will Elaborate the causes and solution about
this
 debatable issue. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why
standard
Suggestion
the standard
 of living is decreasing, but the most conspicuous fact is overpopulation. A majority of people migrating to large cities from rural area which causes inflation because of that the
aminities
a quantity of money
amounts
ailments
 which people should use cannot afford. The
second
 cause is
sedentary lifestyle
Suggestion
a sedentary lifestyle
. Technology
has took
Suggestion
has taken
 so much power in human's
life
 that people are getting lazy day by day.
Furthermore
, people of urban areas are becoming money oriented and they spend most of their time in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
 and don't get time for themselves and their beloved. To solve these issues, the authority should provide facilities in remote areas which can decrease population in large cities and reduce inflation. Because of that, people of all areas will be able to use
aminities
Suggestion
the amenities
amenities
annuities
 that government provides.
Moreover
, people should abate the excessive use of technology and start doing things by themselves which can improve their health.
Last
 but not the least people should invest their time for themselves and their loved ones that can improve mental health as well as quality of
life
. To conclude, people of urban areas should start
solve
Suggestion
solving
 that causes which can raise the qualities of their lives. The authority should start doing improvement in all areas as well.
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