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People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown from other areas. As a results, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantage of this tend outweigh the disadvantage?

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In recent year, these
has been
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have been
 a growing trend toward buying imported
food
 rather than
food
 produced locally.
However
, whether or not
this
 trend benefit people
is
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are
 certainly a contentious one. My view is that the advantage outweighs the disadvantage. Since imported foods are always checked and only the best products end up on our market, those foods always have good quality. Indeed, if a supplier tries to sell low-quality products, it will sooner or later be rejected. Another guarantee that we eat good-quality
food
 is the fact that the reputation of imported company is
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 stake. If they do not get good feedback from consumers, they will do everything to change the supplier and start offering the foods people will enjoy eating. By buying imported
food
 in the long run, we can see that we can save money. When a certain
food
 is imported in
big
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bigger
 quantities, it’s
price
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priced
 even lower and it keeps both producers and buyers busy. Have
(
Accept space
(
bear) in mind that even when
food
 is being imported in
big
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bigger
 quantities, it’s quality is still checked. It is
also
 true that some local traditional
food
 may receive bad influence due to the invasion of foreign
food
. Many traditional
food
 makers are losing their market to giant
food
 companies, and the traditional
food
 making techniques are
also
 fading eventually. But still, the cons are far greater. In sum,
food
 from oversea bring a lot of
advantage
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advantages
such
 as good-quality
food
 and reduced cost, which outweigh
disadvantage
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disadvantages
.
However
, we should not neglect
imported
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the imported food’s negative effect
food
’s negative effect regarding to business competition between foreign
food
 and traditional
food
.
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