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Question: Internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons to your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
 modern era, technology has a great impact on peoples' lives. Some people thing that the
internet
 has disappear the barrier of distances between people to communicate globally. Whereas others believe that it restrict the individuals to socialize.
This
 essay discusses both the view and my position on the above notion.
To begin
 with, positive side of the
internet
 is it allows people to be in contact with their near and dear one without any restriction of distance and culture.
For instance
, a person is living abroad for the educational purpose could contact his family and native friends and it helps him to eliminate the home sickness.
Secondly
, people can learn about many languages, culture and traditions with the help of
internet
.
Thus
 the whole world turns into a global village due to application of the
internet
.
Hence
, the
internet
 is a boon to individual to communicate, to learn from any corner of the world.
On the other hand
, extensive use of the
internet
 lets the people aware about all information of glob, but they do not get involved in the local community which is essential to get good physical and mental health.
As a result
, people get isolated from their group and it leads to depression and loneliness. The student of psychology had surveyed that the
internet
 is the most saviour cause for loneliness of a person.
Moreover
, communicating with the
internet
 may introduce fake people to the commuter and they may get exploited by
such
 wrong persons.
Thus
, the
internet
 is very potential danger for the society where the members of the society might not come together as it did in the past. In conclusion, the
internet
 is a boon to the mankind, but people use it wisely for the betterment of the society. The government should
also
 start a campaign to spread awareness to citizen and
this
 will bring prosperity to their lives.
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