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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world’s #price #fuel
Some individuals believe that raising the cost of
fuel
 is the most effective method to solving world's environmental problems. While I accept that
this
 policy is good to some extent, I believe it is not the best because there are much better measure to reduce environmental issues.
it
Suggestion
It
 might be a good idea to increase the price of
fuel
such
 as coal, petrol and gas because of some reasons.
Firstly
, by making it more costly to purchase
fuel
, government can deter people from using personal vehicles.
For example
, if gasoline is more expensive, people will start using public transport rather than driving a car or riding a motorbike, resulting in a reduction of CO2 emissions, which is responsible for global warming and climate change.
Secondly
, the decrease in the demand
of
Suggestion
for
fuel
as a result
 of high price would lead to the minimization of natural resources exploitation which reduce the problem of waste disposal in
such
 industries.
Lastly
, as the cost of using
fuel
 is higher, people might use them much more efficient.
For example
, if gas prices are higher, Europeans will learn how to cope with the cold and only turn on the heater when necessary.
However
, I would argue that there are much better methods to deal with environmental problems. The
first
 solution us that government should spend more money on conducting research and developing technology to use renewable energy
resources including
Accept comma addition
resources, including
 wind, solar and tidal energy
instead
 of natural resources. By doing
this
, people can reduce energetic burden on nature. The
second
 solution is to have stricter punishments for environmental criminals.
For example
, people who
has been accused
Suggestion
have been accused
 of environmental degradation should be required to pay a huge fine or receive a prison sentence.
This
 makes individuals more likely to respect the law, and environmental issues can be limited.
Additionally
, the government should launch programs or run advertising campaigns to raise people awareness about conserving nature. In conclusion, I believe apart from increasing the price of
fuel
, there are more effective ways to protect the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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