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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In recent years, it has become quite common for high school graduates to take a break from academics before applying to a university.
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 essay will dive into the benefits and drawbacks of that trend. Looking at the positives, one crucial advantage of taking a
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 year is that it simulates personal and skill development.
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 is because by having some free
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 without academic stress, you would be able to practice your hobbies and work on
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 growing your skills,
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 widening your horizons.
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, you would learn more about yourself and your personality, especially regarding your strengths and weaknesses, which takes me to my next point:
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 years can play a vital role in your career orientation as you can have more
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 to discover different job paths and choose what best fits you and your personality.
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, having a year off can
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 present some problems, the most obvious of which is
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 management.
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 it is possible that some students might have the ability to use that
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 wisely, others might be overwhelmed by the amount of free
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 they have and get distracted by other things
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 as friends, movies, etc. Another significant disadvantage is finances.
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 years are often associated with
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 abroad and being unemployed for a quite longer
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 than expected.
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 can lead to major financial difficulties, especially for low-wage households. In conclusion,
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 a
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 year can be quite beneficial as it fosters self-development and contributes to your career decision, we should take into consideration some of its negatives,
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 as
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 scattering and potential financial difficulties.

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The essay covers the main aspects of the topic, addressing both advantages and disadvantages, which is essential for a complete task response.
coherence cohesion
The introduction provides a clear overview of the essay's intention, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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