The chart below shows that total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart shows the UK telephone calls, by call type category. These call types are local fixed line, national and international fixed line, and all calls in mobiles. The chart shows the total number of
minutes
in billions
from 1995-2002.
Firstly
, the local fixed channel illustrates a bell shape figure from 1995-2002. Telephone calls using this
field are 71 minutes
in billions
in 1995 which increases until it reached 90 minutes
in 1999 and decreases until it becomes 71 minutes
again in 2002.
Secondly
, people who uses
national and international, illustrate an increasing straight channel as the years pass by. To demonstrate, it is 38 Change the verb form
use
minutes
in 1995 and increase to 61 minutes
by 2002.
Last
but not the least, people who use mobile calls illustrate an increasing U-shape. It was dramatically lower in 1995 which only have 3 minutes
of calls, converted in the billions
. As the world is changing because of the power of new technology, it gradually becomes high in 2002 with 45 minutes
in the billions
.
Therefore
, I conclude that there's a tendency that local fixed channel
will continue decreasing because more people are switching to mobile phones. Fix the agreement mistake
channels
On the other hand
, calls from international and national increase a
constant number every year like 1-3 Change preposition
by a
minutes
. To sum up
, all telephone lines except local
fixed line increased.Correct article usage
the local
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billions with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 4 times.
▼