Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Each festival has its own i
mprotant
of great significance or value
important
belief and value. Nowadays, people are focusing more towards their enjoyment rather than u
ndestanding
the cognitive condition of someone who understands
understanding
a
ctual importance
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the actual importance
of that tradition.
This
essay will argue that people are still k
nows
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known
about their religious and they always try to perform according to older culture.
Firstly
, there are many different cultural e
vent
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events
h
appens
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happening
in all p
art
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parts
of the c
ountires
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country
countries
counties
and each has their own authenticity. But, t
heir
in or at that place
there
might be some changes has o
ccured
come to pass
occurred
over the time and b
eacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of that people might celebrate in different ways which does not mean that they does not know about p
articular activity.
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a particular activity
particular activities
the particular activity
For an instance, in India people use to celebrate h
oli
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Holi
hole
with natural c
oloures
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
calories
collars
and now they have include some new activities in it to create more fun.
However
, people still k
nows
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know
the reason behind celebrating h
oli.
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Holi
Finding more happiness while celebrating particular festive does not mean they does not aware of s
ignificance.
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the significance
Furthermore
, adding more exciting activities to older culture can
also
help n
ew generation
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the new generation
to keep their interest in it. In past years, many facilities were not a
vailable but
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available, but
now everything is easily accessible and growing population only search for happiness and excitement.
In addition
, people are very busy in their day to day l
ife but
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life, but
when any events c
omes
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come
in the year like New year celebration, they always get t
ogther
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
to make m
ost
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the most
out of it. To conclude, people understand their religion and they always try to take it forward in upcoming days. I totally disagree with a
rguement
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the argument
argument
that people are forgetting the significant value of their tradition.
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