Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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Entertainment is very important in day to day life and it plays an immense role in society as well. There are many people who
believes
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believe
that actors or actresses are getting very high amount of money for their work. I totally agree with the
arguement
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
argument
that they should get more money because they makes our life
more happy
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happier
by doing their work.
Firstly
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,
celebrities
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celebrity
role is to perform various
task
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tasks
to impress the audience and for that they put their all the effort so that they can create
such
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an impactful performance on the screen and which can mostly loved by the people. To become
entertainer
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an entertainer
or other music star, it requires
lot
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lots
of
traning
activity leading to skilled behavior
training
as well as
capability
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capable
of doing
such
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task effectively. After becoming
popular and successful personality
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a popular and successful personality
, they get fame and love by the surrounding and as a
rewards
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reward
they get well paid. For an instance, One movie can make almost 4-5
cr
a hard brittle multivalent metallic element; resistant to corrosion and tarnishing
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car
, and
that is
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because of the half job is done by
leading role
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the leading role
of male or female.
On the other hand
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, there are many other jobs which accounts for good salaries
such
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as producers, computer designer who
developes
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develops
developed
certain visual effect to the non-fiction series and make them more real
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
the movie industry. As well as writers
,
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,
who puts their innovative ideas and thought through
tv
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the tv
and in
result it
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result, it
gives so much smile to the individual who lives in society. Each and every person needs certain appreciation
as a result
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of rewards and by paying a high
weges
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wage
wages
wigs
is one of the
method
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methods
to payback of their
hardwork
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hard work
. To conclude, entertainment helps people in all the situation
such
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as good or bad
to lighten
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lighten
up
mood
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the mood
. I totally agree that music star or pop star should get well paid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue generation
  • Supply and demand
  • Influence on culture
  • Trendsetters
  • Income disparity
  • Essential workers
  • Critical role
  • Public health
  • Endorsements
  • Economies
  • Compensation
  • Significant contribution
  • Technological advancements
  • Global challenges
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