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Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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Entertainment is very important in day to day life and it plays an immense role in society as well. There are many people who
believes
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believe
 that actors or actresses are getting very high amount of money for their work. I totally agree with the
arguement
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
argument
 that they should get more money because they makes our life
more happy
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happier
 by doing their work.
Firstly
,
celebrities
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celebrity
 role is to perform various
task
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tasks
 to impress the audience and for that they put their all the effort so that they can create
such
 an impactful performance on the screen and which can mostly loved by the people. To become
entertainer
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an entertainer
 or other music star, it requires
lot
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lots
 of
traning
activity leading to skilled behavior
training
 as well as
capability
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capable
 of doing
such
 task effectively. After becoming
popular and successful personality
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a popular and successful personality
, they get fame and love by the surrounding and as a
rewards
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reward
 they get well paid. For an instance, One movie can make almost 4-5
cr
a hard brittle multivalent metallic element; resistant to corrosion and tarnishing
Cr
car
, and
that is
 because of the half job is done by
leading role
Suggestion
the leading role
 of male or female.
On the other hand
, there are many other jobs which accounts for good salaries
such
 as producers, computer designer who
developes
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develops
developed
 certain visual effect to the non-fiction series and make them more real
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the movie industry. As well as writers
,
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,
 who puts their innovative ideas and thought through
tv
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the tv
 and in
result it
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result, it
 gives so much smile to the individual who lives in society. Each and every person needs certain appreciation
as a result
 of rewards and by paying a high
weges
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wage
wages
wigs
 is one of the
method
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methods
 to payback of their
hardwork
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hard work
. To conclude, entertainment helps people in all the situation
such
 as good or bad
to lighten
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lighten
 up
mood
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the mood
. I totally agree that music star or pop star should get well paid.
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