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Nowadays people try to balance their life and work with other things in life, but actually some could achieve it so far, what are the reasons for this and how can be solve this problem.

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In today’s fast growing world every individual has tried to give a same priority to their
work
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 as well as personal
life
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. Some people think that after maintaining
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 they build a self-esteem and live a happy
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,
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Accept space
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ut some fail because of high a pressure of
work
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also
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 spoil family
life
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.
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Accept space
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ne of the import factor to maintain balance between
work
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 and a personal
life
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 is an effective time division.
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 will
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 help them to concentrate on
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, particularly during a job hours as well, having leisure time to spend with family.
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, It expands the person’s development in the career as well.
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, in today’s time most of the working women can manage their
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 and a family by taking advantage of the technology and
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 some company’s allows them to do
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 from home.
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, every person can get an opportunity to achieve their goals and build their self-esteem that increase happiness
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 they live a healthy
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.
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, to give a balanced
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 of the citizen,
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 the government and higher authorities have to take a certain steps which, will be beneficial for them.
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, the government should tell the company’s that they allow a flexibility to their employee,
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 as a working hour, in some case
work
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 from home.
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, the government should
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 make the rules that give the relief to an employee that suffering from serious disease like cancer, heart problems. To exemplify
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 giving relaxation to
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 employee creates more positivity and gives strength to deal with the situation. In conclusion, to create balanced
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 person has to give more effort, but the result of
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 happy and healthy
life
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 even in that person can
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 achieve their goal as well. Government and company can get more productivity, which will help in the growth of the economy.
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