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Today level of sress at the work place are increasing trmendously. What are the causes? what are the problem can create?

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It is often seen that
,
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,
today we are living in a
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
 world which is
full
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more full
fuller
 of
stress
 than earlier.There are
manfolding
a pipe that has several lateral outlets to or from other pipes
manifolding
man folding
 factors that have shaped to
this
 scenario and
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 repercussions can be very grave. One obvious reason is that, modern development of
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
.Today's hectic world
,
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,
 technology is a very integral Part of day to day life.When the new technologies developed in the multinational organizations they followed
this
 technology and workers are more productive than they have ever been, so they have to work very keen and meticulous
as a result
 of which employees may become more stressful.
Furthermore
,
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,
 nowadays multinational companies inevitably becoming more and more
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
. Some leadership view is a technique to maximize production and
therefore
 the employees feel higher strain in their work place. It is undeniable that the consequences of
stress
at
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in
 job area can be very grim. In these days
,
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,
stress
 is getting more serious predicament in
job place
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the job place
.The
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
foremast
 corollary is health issues.
Stress
 can have an impact on overall health.The higher pressure on
body
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the body
 may cause various
stress
 disorders like anxiety, Hypertension, Depression, insomnia, outbursts etc.
Likewise
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Likewise, stress
stress
 affecting the quality of our close relationship. When people are stressed they may show withdrawn and distracted character and
also
 they do not have
necessary time
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the necessary time
 for leisure activities
as a result
 of which it can lead to break our close relationship. In conclusion, there are numerous contributors that make
stress
 level is exceedingly high in
work place
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the workplace
workplace
 today and
also
 problem is too obvious and profound to be ignored.
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