The prevention of health problems is more important than treatment.Government funding should reflect that. Do you agree or disagree?

To address the importance of each part of dealing with
health
problems, I am going to
first
review both parts and
then
express my opinion.
Also
the financial perspective, especially the
government
funding of each part will be reviewed in
this
essay. As mentioned above, dealing with
health
problems has two main sides, taking necessary precautions before the
occurance
an event that happens
occurrence
of the
problem
and the
treatment
afterwards. From the
perpsective
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
perspectives
of the involved individual, preventing the
health
problem
is usually much easier and more
preferrable
more desirable than another
preferable
preferably
, since the person is not suffering from the
problem
yet it may save them a lot of pain. There is a wide range of
health
problems and the way to prevent each type (if even possible) varies a lot.
For
example preventing
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example, preventing
bacterial diseases is very different than preventing cancer, while the mental problems are a whole different story.
Also
, some problems cannot be prevented at all,
such
as birth defects (
however some
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however, some
of them can be prevented if diagnosed before birth and soon enough) and disabilities like paraplegia, and some can be prevented but it is virtually impossible to do so and usually systematic actions to prevent them do not exist.
For
example one
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example, one
can not
can not
cannot
prevent PTSD (Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder) because there is no systematic way of doing that, other than advising potential patients (
such
as soldiers or people with the background of mental disorders) to take some actions to minimize the risk.
Although
some types of
health
problems can be prevented and with a high success rate,
for example
controlling diseases
such
as pox through
vaccination
. From the financial perspective, it is
also
preferrable
more desirable than another
preferable
to prevent the
problem
as in most cases the cost of
treatment
is significantly higher than prevent the
problem
. For the diseases that can be prevented through
vaccination it
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vaccination, it
is usually a no brainer to vaccinate. Apart from the damage of having the disease, the
vaccination
cost is usually very low. Depending on the
health
problem
, it is usually better for the
government
to take the funding of
health
problem
prevention into consideration.
Firstly
,
government
supported
health-care
the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession
healthcare
programs may have to spend a lot of their budget to cover the
treatment
of high-cost patients, so if they can be prevented the budget can be saved to better support more low-cost patients.
Secondly
, most of the controlled diseases which can be prevented with
vaccination
are contagious and their outbreak would be a serious
problem
to
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for
the public
health
.
Consequently
, though some problems
such
as
cancer which
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cancer, which
is very costly to treat, cannot be prevented to easily, but the
government
can fund several sections to help with that,
such
as research facilities to help finding better solutions to treat or even to cure some cases and the media to raise awareness of the problems as some types of cancer could be treated way more easily if diagnosed in early stages. To conclude, I think in general the prevention of
health
problems is less costly and less painful,
thus
more important to take into consideration, especially by the
government
.
However we
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However, we
cannot simply ignore the
treatment
section since we cannot prevent all of the problems.

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