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In many countries people are living in a "throwaway society" where things are used for a short time and thrown away. What are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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Many people are experiencing growth
population which
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population, which
 demands more and more materials and the rise of technology is making these materials more easy to
get the
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get, the
 more
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second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 get those things the more
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second person pronoun; the person addressed
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 use them for a short time
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 main causes of throwaway society
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 in the past before technology things were hard to get so people used to use those things for many times even if they were half broken.
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owadays the rise of technology produce more materials faster at the end producing more things can lead to many problems one
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the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable
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these problems is a throwaway society that can lead to the lake of materia
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