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not a good idea and shoud be banned. while others are of opine that the vital scientific innovation can be possible from animal experiments. This will discuss both sides of the argument and will give a plausible conclusion

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Experimenting on animals has become a burning issue in recent times. Some individual think that all experiments on animals is not a good idea and
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be banned.
while
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While
 others are of
opine
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opinion
 that the
vital
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Vital
 scientific innovation can be possible from animal experiments.
This
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 will discuss both sides of the argument and will give a plausible conclusion.
To begin
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 with, some school of thought believes that the
practicals
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practice
practical
 made on animals is bad and should be restricted. These people have reasons because it might create life-cycle imbalance among
wild-life
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Wildlife
Wild-life
species
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 and have a chance of extinction.
This
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not affects
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didn't affect
doesn't affect
isn't affecting
animals but
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animals, but
also
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 to the humans.
For instance
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, many dragon flies in Africa are hunted, trying to make medicine out of it. The insects, which is the primary source of food for flies destroyed the human crops. If one of the
species
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 in
life-cycle chain
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the life - cycle chain
 is disturbed, it can affect all the others too.
Therefore
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, these persons believe that
this
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 should be banned.
On the other hand
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, some
holds
Suggestion
hold
 the view of experiments on animals can bring scientific advancements.
This
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 is in fact true because the
practicals
(computer science) rules determining the format and transmission of data
protocols
 can be made on
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
species
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 before
implementing
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Implementing
 on real life scenarios.
For example
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,
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,
many vaccines for deadly diseases are
initially
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made
having finished or arrived at completion
done
 on animals before applying
on
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to
 humans.
Thus
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,
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,
this
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 can have a positive impact on the innovation and research purposes. To conclude, some argue that experimenting on animals should be banned because of the repercussions on environment while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 thinks that the innovations can be done for the advancements. Personally, I believe
this
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 can be justified for the animals whose population is more rather than implementing on
Use synonyms
species
Suggestion
the species
 under danger of extinction.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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