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Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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This
 essay will summarise and discuss
few
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 fascinating facts about the London Underground Station
Passengers
 inflow
in
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on
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 a regular
day
. The above
graph
 gives an idea of what a
day
in
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London
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the London
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 Tube looks like. The
day
 starts at 6 AM in the morning with a minimum head
count
almost
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 close to 100
people
.
While
 in the evening on the same
day
, the inflow of
passengers
 reaches
to
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about 120. The Underground transportation system in London is known to be one of the most efficient and is used
a
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as a
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primary mode of transportation by many
people
. Mostly, college students, elderly
people
 and
middle class
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people
 prefer to use
tube
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the tube
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 as
this
 is the most economical mode of transportation. If we pay close attention to the
graph
 shown above,
during
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at
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 8 AM a total of 400
passengers
 are using the underground station to reach their destinations.
Thus
 we can infer that most college students and
employee
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employees
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 use
this
 facility to reach
to
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their respective destinations. Since
,
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 most of the colleges or institutes and workplaces have the daily hours fixed, we can understand the surge of the
passengers
 from the
graph
 around 6 PM in the evening, i.e., 18:00.
While
 in the evening the passenger
count
 is reaching close to a majority of 400, we should
also
 notice that the headcount during the
day
 from 11 AM to 4 PM
vary
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varies
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 a lot.
This
 could be
due to
 the lunch hours and
furthermore
, the lowest traveller
count
 is to be seen at 4 PM in the evening. If we compare both morning and evening
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passenger
passger
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passenger
count
 we can understand that the
graph
 is clearly depicting
high
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the high
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 inflow and outflow of
passengers
 in a
day
. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, during the
day
 the passenger flow is variable.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, day, graph, count, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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