The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram
illustartes
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illustrates
about the different stages that a salmon undergo in its
life
cycle from egg to adult fish.
overall
from the diagram we get to know that salmon undergoes
through
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eight different stages in its
life
period from incubation to spawning. salmon
life
begin
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in River where it undergoes
incubation
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an incubation
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period.
Emergence
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The emergence
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of
salmons
from the eggs is
next
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the next
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phase of
thier
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their
lifecycle.only
few
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of
the
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them
resists
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to
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all the harsh conditions in
water
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the water
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and
emerges
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emerge
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out of the egg
then
they are reared in freshwater. During 4th stage of
cycle
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the cycle
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,
salmons
undergo Estuary rearing Before swimming
to
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ocean
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the ocean
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.
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from
estuary
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the estuary
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salmons
enter into
ocean
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the ocean
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and
migrates
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to some rearing areas.During
this
time in
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the ocean
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ocean
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salmons
undergo Growth and maturation
then
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the adult fish again
migratesto
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migrates to
migrate to
spawning areas where it
finally
undergoes spawning in
freash
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fresh
water.the
life
cycle again
continuos
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continues
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vice
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and vice
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versa.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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