The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram
illustartes
about the different stages that a salmon undergo in its Correct your spelling
illustrates
life
cycle from egg to adult fish.
overall
from the diagram we get to know that salmon undergoes through
eight different stages in its Change preposition
apply
life
period from incubation to spawning.
salmon life
begin
in River where it undergoes Change the verb form
begins
incubation
period.Correct article usage
an incubation
Emergence
of Add an article
The emergence
salmons
from the eggs is next
phase of Correct article usage
the next
thier
lifecycle.only Correct your spelling
their
few
of Change the article
a few
the
them Remove the article
apply
resists
Correct subject-verb agreement
resist
to
all the harsh conditions in Change preposition
apply
water
and Correct article usage
the water
emerges
out of the egg Correct subject-verb agreement
emerge
then
they are reared in freshwater.
During 4th stage of cycle
,Add an article
the cycle
salmons
undergo Estuary rearing Before swimming to
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into
ocean
.Add an article
the ocean
Next
from estuary
Correct article usage
the estuary
salmons
enter into ocean
and Add an article
the ocean
migrates
to some rearing areas.During Correct subject-verb agreement
migrate
this
time in Correct article usage
the ocean
ocean
Add a comma
,ocean
salmons
undergo Growth and maturation then
the adult fish again Replace the word
than
migratesto
spawning areas where it Correct your spelling
migrates to
migrate to
finally
undergoes spawning in freash
water.the Correct your spelling
fresh
life
cycle again continuos
Correct your spelling
continues
vice
versa.Correct word choice
and vice
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