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Some people believe that to be a successful sportsperson, one needs to have a natural ability. Others think that hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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To be
a
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an
 established
sportsperson
 a human must have to attain healthier body physics along with good presence of
decision making attitude
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a decision making attitude
 which may be used imperfectly as every
player
 in sports arena has their own style of way to things done. In
this
 diversify earth, there is no particular recipe for success
rather it’s
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rather, it’s
 custom tailored by the
sportsperson
 own
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
 towards the
destination they
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destination, they
 used to setting for that took
advantages
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advantage
 with their physical strength and natural talent. Sports have become
most attractive entertainment sector
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a more attractive entertainment sector
more attractive entertainment sector
 to showcase human’s presence of talent and physical
ability
 in very gorgeous manner front of thousands of people. Wealth and reputation led the people to drive their career in various sports
sector
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sectors
 in
this
 present world. As a part of showcasing the ultimate levels of competition to crowds sportsmen always keen to explore their strength through god gifted talents and physical factors.
As a
result they
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result, they
 try to establish based on the findings among
combination
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the combination
a combination
 of physical
ability
 and natural possessed involved with the game. There are some exceptional sports that might not focus
both
side
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sides
 of a
player
greatly but
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greatly, but
most importantly no
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more importantly, no
more importantly no
 one could not ignore the absence of any of these two functioning
ability
 to show off to mass.
However if
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However, if
 we made our focus on a real example of
most exciting sports
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the most exciting sports
 currently played which is Football
Then
, we must have to acknowledge the rivalry of two tremendous genius and great players may have we seen so far One is Lionel Messi and other astonishing
player
 the great Christiano Ronaldo. They
both
 are two
side
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sides
 of coin if we look at the strength they have.
Messi
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Messiah
 is a god gifted
player
 who had suffered physical problem earlier
of
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in
 his career.
On the other hand
, Cristiano Ronaldo is a perfect example of physical
ability
 a man can achieve through hardship and stay focused on
th
definite article
the
 goal. Though
both
 have
extra edge
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an extra edge
 of advantages on their
side but
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side, but
 they
also
 possessed the slight extra on they can achieve in their deficiency has in. In a short, physical and natural
ability
both
has
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have
 significance on a
sportsperson
portfolio but
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portfolio, but
 as we all are vary one to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 by attitude, body physics and god gifted talents its more on how we react
with
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to
 the things we possessed to achieving
greatest
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greater
great
 of sportsmanship. Prioritizing should be
choosing
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chosen
chose
 by sportsmen step up into the system are being set to go through.

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