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University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many people opine that tertiary education should take the responsibility of encouraging their students to select a wide range of subjects as well as their own subjects. I completely agree with
this
 viewpoint and I will elaborate on the reasons below.
First
 and foremost, I would argue that studying many subjects
in addition
 to their professional
knowledge
 increase their overall
knowledge
 efficiently.
In other words
, many subjects are correlated to each other. A particular good example here is the fact that I had to revise the geography while I was learning the “articles” in English. The reason for
this
 is that I would not have gained sufficient
knowledge
 if I had not had some basics in geography.
Therefore
, it is absolutely imperative for students to extend their learning style so as to achieve excellent academic results in the future.
Secondly
, I believe that students will be able to
success
Suggestion
successfully
 in job prospects in the future by means of acquiring manifold subjects. To be more precise, if the student has a wide range of acquaintances from several subjects, he or she will have an opportunity of doing more than one work.
For example
, those who have certain
knowledge
on
Suggestion
of
about
 languages as well as
laws
Suggestion
the laws
 of their country can work as a translator and
lawyer
Suggestion
a lawyer
.
Moreover
, it is
also
 beneficial for learners not to face long-term unemployment later their life. In conclusion, as the two
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 reasons above, I strongly support the assertion of giving encouragement to the student to learn more subjects as much as possible rather than just acquiring their own professions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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