Some people think that museum should be enjoyable place to entertain people while others believe that the purpose of them is to educate.discuss both views and give your opinion..

It is true that
museum
play
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plays
Paramount role in
represting
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repressing
the history in various ways, to enhance our
knowledge
about previous culture, traditional and many more.There have been ongoing debates whether
museum
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museums
a museum
the museum
should be enjoyable place or educational purposes. I,
however
, before reaching my own opinion, discuss both sides in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, the most
predominent
having a quality that thrusts itself into attention
prominent
predominant
reason of
museum
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the museum
must be entertaining site is that "feeling of boredom".To explain it,
although
, nowadays, everyone is busy in
their
in or at that place
there
schedules
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Schedules
or they do not give enough time to their family members
,
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,
they can visit
historical
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historic
buildings.
Mostly
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Most
families make a family trip to visit entertaining locations. As
such
Rishikash, Golden temple as a term of religious places. Another reason is "Tourist attraction". To illustrate it
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,
many visitors come to see the museums from different nations.They believe that it is
very fascinating moment
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a very fascinating moment
of them as well as they can
also
enjoy over there. A
best
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good
illustration is that from my personal experience,
last
winter in January my cousin came from Canada and he had visited
golden temple
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the golden temple
as well as got all
knowledge
about it after that he collected various pictures.
As a result
, museums
has made
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have made
a
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an
entertainment location for tourists.
on
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On
the flip side, there are multifarious reason which
describe
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describes
to them behind the educational purposes.To put it simply, many schools, college and
universities'
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university
students are visiting over there to enhance their
knowledge
as well as they can read about old fashion culture and see many
scalpture
a three-dimensional work of plastic art
sculptures
owing to history.
Moreover museums
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Moreover, museums
provide all previous history
realted
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
reacted
to what Happened in the past years and many more.A
best
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good
better
example is that
partition
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partition, museum
museum
is renowned
museum
, which is located in Amritsar. It has a rich collection of stories
,
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,
events
,
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,
arts and
artifacts
a man-made object taken as a whole
artefacts
related to partition of India in 1947. In turn, historical places
also
aid to gain the
knowledge
for learners. In conclusion
,
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,
I have mentioned both views on the above paragraphs and I think that museums give education as well as it has made a best
tourists
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tourist
place.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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