May people try to look younger than their age. What are the reasons people do this. Do you think this is a good thing or bad thing

Age
is
one
of the most contributing factor in individual life. There are many people does
different kind
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a different kind
of makeover which can help them to look more younger than their actual
age
. There are mainly two
reason
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reasons
,
one
is they want to look fit and beautiful front of the others and
second
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the second
is that to stay strong in
this
competitive world. According to me there is nothing wrong to look more active. There are many adults who are in their mid 40 or 50, they always want to look more attractive like younger generation. Because, nowadays there are so many
type
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types
of cosmetic products are available in the
market which
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market, which
attracts the adults and give them a promise of better results.
However
, these all can help them to look more
perefect
being complete of its kind and without defect or blemish
perfect
according to their
age
because certain products help them to reduce wrinkles and make their skin more tighten.
For instance
, In
market
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a market
the market
the brand name Loreal
sell
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sells
the night
cream which
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cream, which
can
reduces
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reduce
face wrinkles by using 7
day
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days
.
Companys
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Company's
Companies
profit increased
upto
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up to
50% in
coming year
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the coming year
coming years
because of
this
product. Ultimately, people
tries
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try
are trying
have tried
all random things to just look younger. Another reason, there
are
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is
so much competition is going on especially in
bollywood
the film industry of India
Bollywood
industries where all the old actress use their
effeort
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
efforts
to hide their
age
by doing cosmetic surgeries. Recent
advance
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advances
technology brightens the skin tones as well as other helps to reduce weight.
As a
result they
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result, they
get same fame and popularity like others.
For example
,
one
of the famous
actress
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actresses
recently did skin brightening treatment and become
one
of the highest paid celebrity in the world. In
adition
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
additions
additional
to
this
, if you want to be in your field and become more
sucessful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
you need to look more energetic same like younger people. In my opinion,
age
is just factor which does not have any relation with your performance. In some countries, 60 year old people are more active than
younger generation
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younger generations
. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
insted
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
of hiding
age we
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age, we
need to become
more strong
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stronger
physically and mentally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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