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Government should spend more money on railways and roads. To what extent do yo agree or disagree with this statement

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In
this
 present-world of technological advancements and intensive globalization, travelling far from home to the designated workplace by making use of either railways or roads, has become a norm. In
this
 context, railways are awfully inexpensive and eco-friendly means of communication, but no one can deny the comfort and convenience of commuting by road. None of these facts can be taken lightly,
thus
, in my honest opinion, the
government
 should spend invariably equal proportions of
money
 on both railways and roads. In the
first
 case scenario, even though railway is cheap, the trains are often late and the staff is usually lousy, which can cause the passengers severe distress and panic when they have to reach their destination on time.
Also
, ill-managed train timings can lead to overcrowding which increase the risk of theft and make the safety of passengers pretty questionable.
For instance
, the central railways in Mumbai are generally delayed by twenty minutes on an average which result in increasing cases of accidents of people from falling down the crowded trains.
Therefore
, it makes complete sense for the
government
 to direct a decent amount of
money
 towards the development of more railway tracks and incorporating a more productive staff for a proficient management of train-timings as well as effective crowd control.
On the other hand
, we have roads which make use of privately owned vehicles or cabs as a means of transport. Roads with narrow corridors that have sustained damage, resulting in potholes, give rise to unnecessary
traffic
 jams and can provide a bumpy ride to the passengers, which can be dangerous for pregnant women. These
traffic
 jams cause unwanted waste of time as well as have severe environmental repercussions, which involve an elevated amount of global warming and pollution.
For example
, the roads in Andheri have sustained quite a lot of damage, and are full of un-repaired potholes, giving rise to
traffic
 jams that easily span more than over twenty minutes.
Thus
, it is imperative for
government
 to spend
money
 on roads for repairing and constructing ways with broader pathways for a smoother flow of
traffic
. In a nutshell, spending
money
 on both railways and roads by the
government
 has become an overwhelming necessity so that, we as a community, can escape the nasty hazards of ill-managed means of communication, but at the same time, can
also
 enjoy the fruits of commuting by either roads or railways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic development
  • Accessible
  • Efficient transport
  • Trade and tourism
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Public transportation
  • Emissions
  • Job opportunities
  • Workforce
  • Unemployment rates
  • Modernized
  • Safety standards
  • Budget allocation
  • Holistic approach
  • Underfunding
  • Crucial areas
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