The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 23.17

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  23.17
This
line graph illustrates information about how seniors in the United States are using their spare time
in
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the
year
1980
till
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2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that reading, hiking, watching tv and surfing the internet experienced an increase in their numbers,
while
theatre considered a downward trend in their rate. In the
1980's
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, hiking started
with
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20%.
This
sharply rose up to a peak of 80% in the final
year
, which contributed to
be
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the most popular activity in
2010's
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.
Furthermore
, reading comprises 30% of the activities in 1980.
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was 30
percent
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lower than watching tv. Both of the enterprises showed fluctuation in their rate and increase to 60% and 65% in the final
year
.
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the beginning, surfing the internet contributed 5% of the numbers.
This
showed
a
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growth
to
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15% in the
year
2000. In 2010, it increased to a percentage of 50. Theatre started with 50%, which was the
second
significant project of the elderly people. In ten years, it dropped down to 30%. In the final
year
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it experienced an increase of 45%, which remained the least favoured hobby.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.

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