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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples chosing to have no children.What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children.

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In today's modern world world
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 in many countries couples have to decide that they will
born
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bear
 babies and
this
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 trend have become more common in many countries. There are some reasons behind
this
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 matter.
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 of all
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a huge number of people say that it's
is
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been
good
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a good decision
decision
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 because of nowadays the inflation rate has been increased
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in
 large scale in many countries so
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 of that people have been taking biggest decisions. They say
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,
we
can not
can not
cannot
 give to mainly amenities to their children.
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 they happy that
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in
 their
decision
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. From my perspective
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,
this
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decision
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have kept
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has kept
 lots of disadvantages rather
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then
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than
 advantages.
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, whose couples decided
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 they will face lots of problems in every stage of lives. The children are mainly a part of
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 and without
children our lives
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children in our lives
children, our lives
 will be dull and boring
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it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 biggest reality of
life
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.
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, no one can not alive without
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bless
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blessing
blesses
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, Allah
give
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gives
 to all
people lots
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people, lots
 of happiness through children and we
also
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enjoye
derive or receive pleasure from; get enjoyment from; take pleasure in
enjoy
enjoyed
 from the heart
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similarly
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Similarly
, if people having stable on their
determin
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determined, then
determined then
then
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 the colours of
world
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the world
 will be finish gradually due to all happiness with children. Apart of that
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,
 when those people get
oldest
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older
old
 they will face lots difficulties go towards ahead because
of its a fact
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its a fact
 of
life
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 that no one
such
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 care which just can do our real children. To summarise, without
children their
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children, their
life
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 will be dull and colours less and
this
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decision
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 will give to them lots of disadvantages to them.

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