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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. Do the advantages of this new approach outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the past in order to write a research paper or a report, physical presence was necessary to attend the lecture and being tangibly present in the libraries for research.
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 was on the one teacher to teach a certain subject. With the evolution of
technology flexibility
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technology, flexibility
 for a more various age group who could not previously attend
schools
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school
 as they had children and elderly to take care of are able to learn
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 using a combination of online classes, in class participation through video resource including working parents or parents with children are able to In conclusion modern methods of using technology
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 education
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have revolutionized
 the access of information, giving students flexibility which the traditional methods lacked.
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 the advantages far
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be heavier than
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 the disadvantages.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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