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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree? Use personal examples in your response

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In recent years, wedding celebrations have become a fashion statement and
hence
 people tend to spend huge
amount
 of
money
. Some of them think that costing a lot of
money
 on weddings can cause problems for couples.
in
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In
 my opinion, it is personal to spend huge
amount
 of
money
 on weddings, whereas
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 partially agree
to
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with
 the statement.
in
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In
 today's world, marriage has become a business and people who like to show off usually spend a lot of
money
 for complete functions. Because of
this
 people with low financial conditions have to face consequences as they cannot have lavish weddings and spend a huge
amount
 of
money
. Rich people have created a concept of big fat weddings where the wedding will be planned out of their home country and they
also
 will have two or three events.
For example
, Ambani's big fat wedding had many functions everyday with huge setups and number of people attending the functions.
Athough
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Although
Though
this
 seems to be very wonderful events but is not affordable by all. On
other hand
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the other hand
,
this
 big fat
weddings
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wedding
 can be a problem for couples in many ways. The wedding days are very hectic for bride and groom due to the number of events to attend which will
belonger
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be longer
 than expected
also
 that can lead to their illness.
the
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The
 events can make them restless till their wedding day comes.
one
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One
 more reason in my opinion is the
amount
 of
money which
Accept comma addition
money, which
 is used in these weddings can be saved for the
bride and groom future
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future bride and groom
 and they can use it in any possible way in their upcoming life.
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In
in conclusion
,
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 i feel people should spend limited
money
 on weddings
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