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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree? Use personal examples in your response

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In recent years, wedding celebrations have become a fashion statement and
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 people tend to spend huge
amount
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 of
money
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. Some of them think that costing a lot of
money
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 on weddings can cause problems for couples.
in
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In
 my opinion, it is personal to spend huge
amount
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 of
money
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 on weddings, whereas
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 partially agree
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with
 the statement.
in
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In
 today's world, marriage has become a business and people who like to show off usually spend a lot of
money
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 for complete functions. Because of
this
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 people with low financial conditions have to face consequences as they cannot have lavish weddings and spend a huge
amount
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 of
money
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. Rich people have created a concept of big fat weddings where the wedding will be planned out of their home country and they
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 will have two or three events.
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, Ambani's big fat wedding had many functions everyday with huge setups and number of people attending the functions.
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Although
Though
this
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 seems to be very wonderful events but is not affordable by all. On
other hand
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the other hand
,
this
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 big fat
weddings
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wedding
 can be a problem for couples in many ways. The wedding days are very hectic for bride and groom due to the number of events to attend which will
belonger
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be longer
 than expected
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 that can lead to their illness.
the
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The
 events can make them restless till their wedding day comes.
one
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One
 more reason in my opinion is the
amount
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 of
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money which
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money, which
 is used in these weddings can be saved for the
bride and groom future
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future bride and groom
 and they can use it in any possible way in their upcoming life.
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In
in conclusion
,
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I
 i feel people should spend limited
money
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 on weddings
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