IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching with the technology available today, there is no justification for it, and everything should be online. To what extent do you agree or disagree? give your own opinion

#lectures #auditoriums #numbers #students #technology #justification
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Education
Use synonyms
 is very important for a nation of successful country.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 should introduce new policies and projects for
improvement
Suggestion
the improvement
 of
education
Use synonyms
system
Use synonyms
, but due to advance in
techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 and internet
facility many
Suggestion
facility, many
perivate
confined to particular persons or groups or providing privacy
private
Use synonyms
university
Suggestion
universities
 have introduced online
education
Use synonyms
system
Use synonyms
. Some people think that traditional and old method of teaching is
best
Suggestion
the best way
way
Use synonyms
 for
education
Use synonyms
, but some appose
this
Linking Words
way
Use synonyms
 of
aducation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
. Both views have advantages and disadvantages. In
this
Linking Words
 essay I will discuss both viewpoints.
To begin
Linking Words
 with,
Education
Use synonyms
 is
necessory
absolutely essential
necessary
necessarily
 for everyone
successfull
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 career. Students go to college and
university
Use synonyms
 not only for learning, but
also
Linking Words
 for
personality
Suggestion
personal
groming
activity leading to skilled behavior
grooming
.
For instance
Linking Words
, A teacher can teach what is good and bad things.
Secondly
Linking Words
, Attending lecture in any auditorium makes people punctual and regular.They meet other
collegues
an associate that one works with
colleagues
. In college and
unversity
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
 presentation skill can be developed,
that is
Linking Words
 very
helpfull
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
 in
creating communicating
Accept comma addition
creating, communicating
, leadership,
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
 skills in students. On
other hand
Suggestion
the other hand
, online courses
is
Suggestion
are
 another
way
Use synonyms
 for
education
Use synonyms
, but is
improtant
of great significance or value
important
 for those who cannot
reached
Suggestion
reach
 college and
university
Use synonyms
 easily.
For example
Linking Words
, if somebody who have not much financial resources to study abroad
then
Linking Words
 he can do some short courses
availble
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
 on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 but these courses are not much
worthfull
engaged in or accustomed to close observation
watchful
. In conclusion, both views have positive and negative advantages it depends on anybody resources
hain
obtain
gain
 access to
university
Use synonyms
. I believe that
traditional
Suggestion
the traditional way
way
Use synonyms
 of
Use synonyms
education
Suggestion
the education system
system
Use synonyms
 is most important for personality development
then
Linking Words
 online
system
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by waleed.ayub961 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional teaching methods
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • E-learning platforms
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Technological advancement
  • Flexibility in learning
  • Self-paced study
  • Immediate feedback
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Geographical barriers
  • Digital divide
  • Social environment
  • Networking opportunities
  • Hands-on experience
What to do next:
Look at other essays: