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Thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

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The line graph illustrates
number
Suggestion
a number
the number
 of thefts per thousand vehicles between 1990 and 1999 in four countries: Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada. Overall, thefts in Great Britain outnumbered other countries' figures by
significant margin
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a significant margin
significant margins
, representing more than 15 during 1990-99 years. Remaining countries' thefts constituted almost
same numbers
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the same numbers
 in 1990, while by the end of 1999 the figures in Sweden
has risen
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have risen
 almost threefold and were well above those in France and Canada. The least numbers of thefts were documented in Canada. A closer look at the data reveals fluctuations in figures throughout 1990-99 years.
For instance
, figures in Great Britain had two steady increases in 1992 and 1996 up to about 20 and two falls in 1993 and 1990 down to almost 15. Figure in Sweden has made steady, but significant growth up to 15 by the end of 1999, meanwhile trajectories for France and Canada remained plateau with only occasional variations of about 3 during given years.
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