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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

#people #case #traveler
It is true that travelling
become
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became
 a top hobby of the masses.
in
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In
 the past few years, the trend of travelling has increased significantly.In
this
 essay, I will look at some
reasons behind of
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reasons behind
 it and discuss some benefits of travelling for the
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
.
To begin
 with, there are
number reason
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a number reasons
number reasons
 for rising levels of using travelling.
one
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One
 of the predominant reasons is "better facilities". To put it simply, in the past few years
,
Accept space
,
the trend of using public
transport
 has increased significantly as well as masses really love to
travel
 by public
transport
 owing to better facilities. Another reason is "Time consuming" which leads to save the time.
folks
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Folks
 tend to
travel
 by public vehicles
such
 as aeroplanes, buses, trains and
many
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much
 more. They can consume their time with the using of public
transport
. As a consequence, Traveller love to
travelling
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travel
,
Accept space
,
 today, rather than before. There are several benefits that lead to more interest of
traveller
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the traveller
a traveller
 by travelling.
Firstly
, travelling helps us to people inside and outside of the nations because of working purposes, regarding study's and so on.
Secondly
, usually masses more preference to public
transport
 rather than
praivate
confined to particular persons or groups or providing privacy
private
 vehicles due to mitigate the pollutions as well as they have not
face
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faced
 traffic jam more. Today,
masses
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the masses
deem
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will deem
 that public
transport
 is safer for them whenever, they
travel
 on the long distance than they prefer
travel
 by it. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
I have mentioned both, why is
this
 case and benefits of travelling for
traveller
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travellers
the traveller
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Globalization
  • Professional development
  • Social media platforms
  • Exotic locations
  • Cultural exchange
  • Personal growth
  • Adaptable
  • Open-minded
  • Mental health
  • Daily routines
  • Responsibilities
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