Some people think secondary school pupils should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is claimed that middle schoolers ought to learn worldwide news, being one of the subjects
studied
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studied, in
in addition
to the others they already have, while others argue that teaching current affairs to children is wastage of their time.
This
essay will discuss both perspectives and reach a concluding view. On the one hand, those who support that
schoolkids
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school kids
should be taught other matters about
globalization claim
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the globalization claim
that they could develop an interest at the young age and keep them aware of the international events around the world.
For example
, they would be able to present some of ideas and create awareness campaigns regarding global
warming
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warming, although
although
their motives do not take into consideration sometimes because they are some children.
In addition
, it could be an encouraging factor for them and stimulate them to participate in various sports competitions watching
international sports news
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the international sports news
.
Therefore
,
this
concept could contribute for a great encouragement
for
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to
their
next
period as adults.
On the other hand
, those who oppose
this
thought argue
that is
a wealth of
information
apart from their common classes. The pupils are already burdened with other topics,
such
as mathematics, foreign languages, sciences at an early age.
Moreover
, the students at the age of 11 years old are still in infancy and study international news could be an impact for their thinking and create a negative image
on
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in
the world. The news channel or even online sites could affect them emotionally because there are most of times any
information
for the rating only rather than audience desires. To conclude,
although
the global
information
could be a beneficial source of
information
for them, it seems to me that adults should not load them with much
information
because of their ages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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